Hola! My name is Lily I am in Te Waka Ako at Waikowhai Primary School. I really like the way you have written a story related to school. This made me think about when I wrote a story about a teacher at school who all of a sudden turned into a screaming monster. Maybe next time you could read over your writing and make sure it makes sense. If you would like to see my learning type up http://wpslilyw.blogspot.co.nz/. AdiĆ³s!
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Hola! My name is Lily I am in Te Waka Ako at Waikowhai Primary School. I really like the way you have written a story related to school. This made me think about when I wrote a story about a teacher at school who all of a sudden turned into a screaming monster. Maybe next time you could read over your writing and make sure it makes sense. If you would like to see my learning type up http://wpslilyw.blogspot.co.nz/. AdiĆ³s!
ReplyDeletethank you for your helpful comment, also have you made a story about something like this before?
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